07/28/2015

Round 5 Closed


Apologies for the radio silence on our end! As you probably know, Round 5 is now closed!
We have a lot of heavy stuff to go through now, so please be patient and give us time to properly judge your rounds. We do not currently know how long it will take us. But thank you, all, for sticking with us for this long!

Please, while you're waiting, have a seat, take a break, kick your feet up! We'll be back with your winners as soon as possible!

07/013/2015

Extension


You have a one week extension! Sorry for the late notice and best of luck.

The new due date is July 22th, 11:59PM EDT.


05/08/2015

Judging Update


Due to the presence of finals and the careful consideration of the final round, results will be delayed. Semi-finalists, perhaps use this time to take a short break before you have to start thinking about and cranking out your rounds! You've got fantastic entries, you deserve a break!

04/24/2015

Round 4 is now closed!


You have a three day grace period (please let us know if you will be making changes and additions), but then we will get right to judging! Results will be up in approximately two weeks. Thank you!

04/22/2015

Deadline Reminder


This is a deadline reminder!

The  due date is April 24th, 11:59PM Eastern Standard Time.

04/09/2015

Extension


You have a two week extension! Sorry for the late notice. Please use your time wisely.

The new due date is April 24th, 11:59PM Eastern Standard Time.

4/2/2015
Deadline Reminder and misc. things


Hello all! Just a reminder that you have just under a week to finish your entries! If you have any complications, please send us a note!

Also, for those who are not competing, we have a couple of plugs for other OCTs you might be interested in!

:iconsurvivethenightoct: SurviveTheNightOCT is a Five Nights at Freddy's based OCT for mostly humanoid characters where the competitors are trapped in Freddy Fazbear's pizza for the night. They are currently accepting reference sheets, and plan to open auditions mid-april.

Not only that, but, :iconmulligrubs-oct: Mulligrubs-OCT Is a super secret OCT in the making that's not open yet, but we wanted to say check it out and keep an eye out for updates!

2/22/2015
Results Update


Hello all, we are extremely sorry for the delay on results. We're doing a different critique style, which has taken longer, in addition to a number of extreme family emergencies, work, and moving to different countries. But fear not!! We will be posting the results of the votes tonight at 9 pm EST (so you all can get to bed at a decent hour. We know how school and work hours go....). Critiques will be following later this week, but we wanted to post the winners and the match-ups so you can get to work on Round 4!
Admins will be in the chat in an hour and a half or so. See you then!

1/30/2015
Judging Delay


Due to a family emergency with one of the judges, Judging will be delayed a bit. Apologies for the delay.

1/17/2015

Round 3 is Now Closed!


Thank you all for your entries. We have begun judging, and will have results up in two weeks! The exact date will be posted when we're closer to being done.

1/16/2015

Last Day


Today, January 16th, is the last day to get your entries for Round Three in. Anything submitted after today will be considered late and will not count towards your round. Those who already submitted should take this time to proofread, because we've noticed quite a few repeated typos and misspellings in your rounds.

-Mot

01/12/2015

Four Day Reminder


You have until 11:59 on January 16th to get your entries in. There will be no grace period after that date. Anything submitted after the 16th will be considered late

01/04/2015

Extension granted


Due to the amount of people asking us for time, we have granted you one extra week.

The new due date is January 16th, 11:59PM Eastern Standard Time.

Good luck.

12/30/2014

One Week Reminder and Happy Holidays


Heads up that the Round 3 deadline is January 7th! If you need extensions (or think you'll need them) now is the time to let us know.

We hope everyone had a good Christmas this year, and we're looking forward to starting off the new year with you all! May 2015 be a good one for you :heart:


11/21/2014

Round 2 Judging Update


Apologies for the radio silence over the past few weeks, but fear not! Results shall be up this weekend.



10/20/2014

Round 2 Deadline Reminder


Attention competitors, apologies- this should have gone up two days ago. However, this is your FIVE DAY WARNING. In five days, the round will conclude- If you have any concerns, please remember to note us.



9/19/2014

Round 1 Judging Update


Attention competitors, the wait is almost over. Results will be posted tomorrow evening with matchups soon to follow! Admins will be in the chat room for a few hours before (and probably after) the results are posted, so come and hang with us! The chat journal will be updated with we start up.


6/18/2014

Final Day


Attention competitors! Today is officially the final day to get your stuff in, though we still have a grace period. We request that if you will be using the grace period for your audition and you have not submitted your reference sheet, we request that you do that today!

If for some reason you cannot due to special circumstances, but you are still are going to be using the grace period, please contact us! Also contact us if you need more time past the grace period, and we will look at situations on a case by case basis.

Also, please, another reminder note us when you finish your auditions.

-Azrael

6/18/2014

Audition Extension


We have decided to give a one week extension, with a three day grace period. The new deadline is June 27 at 11:59 EST, but you can still submit and edit entries until Monday, June 30th at 11:59. If you have a special circumstance, please note us. Good luck!

-Adrael

6/15/2014

Deadline Reminder


Heads up that there's slightly less than a week until the audition deadline! If you need more time, please let us know and we will consider giving an extension, but we can't help if you don't ask.

-Adrael

5/6/2014

Auditions Reminder


This is just a friendly reminder that we do not monitor your auditions. Please note us when you finish them so that we know you have completed them.

-Azrael



5/5/2014

Deadline Reminder!


Attention all competitors, this is a reminder that your auditions are due in just under a month. We're expecting a lot from all of you! Get those auditions in!

-Azrael


4/5/2014

Regarding Listing Weaknesses


Please remember that being able to be wounded or killed is NOT a valid weakness, nor is being human. Weaknesses are also not a slight inconvenience, such as 'not being very good' at something. A weakness is something that can be a detriment. As an example, 'not very good at swimming' is not a weakness. 'Cannot swim' is, but only where applicable.

Another type of weakness would be, say, having fire powers, but not being fireproof. Perhaps they control a certain element that makes them weak to its opposite. Please make weaknesses make sense, and try to list more than one. You are not RPG bosses with only one obscure or glaring weakness. You are fallible mortals. List things important or unexpected.

Oh, and just to clarify, saying your powers can't do something is also not a weakness. If it's important enough to mention, add it to the powers section.

-Mot

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4/4/2014

News and Announcements, Spectator Entries


We've created a News and Announcements page for anything we need to tell you guys. It will be updated with relevant information and anything we need to tell you. If a judge needs to tell you something, you'll probably find it here.

We have also gotten the question of whether spectator entries are allowed. Yes, they are.

For those who do not know,  spectator entries are a place for those of you who would like to participate, but can't or are eliminated, to join in the fun. Your character can go through the rounds and interact with other characters in a completely non-canon environment where your work will not be critiqued by the judges-- which also means that you won't be qualified for a prize. There will be no time limits, and you can jump into whichever round you want. It's all for fun and games.

If you are eliminated from the tournament at any point, this is also perfect place to continue your story at your own pace. However, we would like to ask that you are respectful to your fellow members. If you were eliminated and continue your storyline, or make an alternate ending please remember to respect your previous opponent's round and characters.  

Also for all, please remember that whenever you include a character that isn't yours, you get the creator's permission and you portray the character with as much respect as you are able. Otherwise, You have free rein here, have fun, and ask the judges if you have any additional questions.

-Azrael

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3/31/2014

Chat Use


I would like to remind everyone that excessive icon use in a chat can bog down computers and cause lag. Because of this, I had set the icon limit for non-judges to five per post. Due to recent happenings after the chat event, your limit has been reduced to one per post. It shall be reduced to none if it happens again.

Icon use is a privilege that will need to be earned back by those who may frequent the chat in the future. I apologize if this seems extreme in any way, but I will do what I can to keep this OCT orderly and convenient for everyone when possible. I will return to five when I feel it's safe.

- Mot, Guardian of Domestic Death

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3/10/2014

Immortality


Dear potential participants,

Do to recent events, it has come to my attention that we need to state the following- Because of the nature of this OCT, there is no such thing as immortality. Not even the current archangel of death is immortal, considering the goal is to kill her, and we would appreciate it if you would refrain from using the term 'immortal' in any sense to describe your character. Mortality, in this world, is inevitable.

Thank you,
-Mot
Location: Seventh Ring of Heaven
Humilitas = Humility


This is the final stretch, folks. Let's wrap it up and see your grand finale! Give everyone someone to root for!

Matchups

Mona head by Motlings  vs Harrison  by Motlings
( Aroda vs Schizobot )

Not only that, our runner up contestants have voted to have a Matchup to determine third place. For this round, you will continue out your plot as if you had not lost the semifinals, carrying on to defeat Adrael and finishing up your individual stories.

Jack Headshot by Motlings vs   Annamniel By Broeckchen-d7pyiy4 by Motlings Rose 2 by Motlings
( Baka-Moyashi vs awkwardkiller )

Your deadline is July 15th at 11:59 PM EST.

If you have any questions, please feel free to note us!




Sorry for the wait, all. Due to unforeseen circumstances, there was a stall in things, however we finally got the judging done. This will be updated as more critiques are finalized and added.


Mona head by Motlings  vs Jack Headshot by Motlings

Aroda:

:iconazraelsmith:
I really liked the different panels and how they worked together and blended together as a flash book, as usual, and the interactions between the characters were absolutely adorable and made me really feel for the characters. They had a lot of chemistry together and I really appreciate how all the characters bounced off each other. While there was some breaking of the fourth wall, it wasn’t ever obtrusive, and at times even funny, such as in chapter 9 when Mona broke Jack’s panel with her hand.  You did a great job balancing humor and drama, and I really enjoy the plot that you’ve got going. Maalak’s garden of hands is extremely disturbing and it’s sad to see Judea’s hand there, but at the same time extremely awesome to see.

I admittedly feel like I missed something between Mona and Maalak’s relationship. The switches between father and grand-father just threw me off, and I wish it were spelled out a bit more. Additionally, while I do wish I could have seen a more finished product, I think I appreciate the animation more than perfect flash comics. I really like your use of your medium and how you worked the plot together. I wonder now, though, if this is Mona’s climax, how you would continue this story? A climax mid-tournament isn’t unheard of, but it’ll be tough to follow up with.

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
The animation was amazing. I can’t imagine how much time and patience it took to put all that together. There were fewer blob faces for the most part, though some scenes in chapter 11 made it hard to differentiate between Maalak and Mona. I didn't have an issue with father/grandfather being used interchangeably, it's fairly common when referring to an immortal ancestor. I've definitely used it with characters in the past, and you did explain it when Jack and Gideon were speaking pretty early on. The backgrounds in chapters 9 were really nice, and the hand garden was eerie and disturbing… especially with Judea’s arm there. The banter between Mona, Gideon, and Jack was perfect and hilarious, especially Jack’s tiny crush on Mona. You drew on a lot of different aspects of the Angels Ascended universe and it made your story very 3-dimensional and intriguing. I loved the inclusion of Judea's guardian. Judea was such an influential part of Mona's story early on and I'm really glad you haven't dropped her on the wayside. Likewise, the parallels between Mona and what Adrael has gone through really pulled at my heartstrings, and I’m so glad you included Samael in this sequence.
While the animations were really nice, I would rather have had fewer animations and seen a more polished end to chapter 11. I’ve also noticed this in previous rounds, but some of the transitions between pages is really jarring. We go from smooth animation to an abruptly white or dark screen with an arrow at the bottom, and it really messes with the immersion. My other critiques are pretty small, there were a couple minor typos, and Gideon’s font would switch from yellow to Mona’s shade of red to orange. I wasn’t sure if it was background colors playing a trick on my eyes, but it’s something to watch out for in the future (not that Gideon will be around much). I’m not a huge fan of the backlit lettering, but that’s more of a personal preference than a legitimate critique.


Baka-Moyashi

:iconazraelsmith:
The expressions and the interactions between the characters were great. You could really feel the emotion in all of the words, through facial and body language. The characters are not only in character, but also amusing and worked well off each other. The pairs seemed to bond a lot, which makes their separation all the more tragic.. I also admire your backgrounds, as they have structure and are consistent. The backgrounds can be used as points of reference, and that to me shows effort and spacial awareness that many artists don’t think to consider. Kudos!

I felt like while there was a lot of interaction, there wasn’t much development or rather not enough time for it. There’s a lot of things happening, but it pushes out the time needed for in depth characterization, and overall, I really didn’t feel like much happened. I also feel like the deaths for Gideon and Aroda came out of nowhere. There really wasn’t any buildup, despite there being a fight.

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
I’ll wholeheartedly admit that I was cooing over the entire travel montages. The expressions and various scenarios were adorable, and really built up the bonds between the pairs. Your style is extremely expressive and while the backgrounds were pretty simple, I could easily tell where the characters were in relation to each other and it provided a really good frame of reference for the fight sequence. I particularly enjoyed the attention to detail in the tunnel, with Mona’s eyes being the only light source. The fight scene also had some really good aspects too it; Jack losing his good leg, and you did a really great job mimicking Aroda’s art for Mona’s fighting style. And while I could praise your art style for another paragraph, there were some problems that were impossible to ignore. There were dozens of typos. Adrael’s name was consistently misspelled, there were extra letters in miscellaneous words, some words were incomplete. There were a couple places where speech bubbles were pointed at the wrong character. Your story was really cute, the dialogue was all great, but there wasn’t a whole lot of plot driving it onward. Travel montages are really risky in an OCT setting, because it’s easy to spend too much time on the sweet character interactions, and then neglect the fight sequence because you run out of time or get too attached to the opponent characters. While Gideon’s death was part of Aroda’s canon, it really came out of nowhere in your entry, same with Mona’s death. It’s worth mentioning that Jack didn’t actively kill his opponent again.


Aroda: [WINNER]


Annamniel By Broeckchen-d7pyiy4 by Motlings Rose 2 by Motlings vs Harrison  by Motlings

Schizobot:

:iconazraelsmith:
I really enjoyed the ways you used grayscale without making the comic seem flat. The paneling was also very good, and I enjoyed how you drew everyone. They have fantastic expressions and body language, and the plot was short and concise without being shallow. However, while Harrison got a lot of development, Anna didn’t really get much development. She got a lot of screentime, but we didn’t really get any further on her thought processes or reasonings. While she went back to fight Harrison after talking to the Shady Man who really pushed her buttons, I think I would have preferred to see her thought process. He brought up Rose’s death, how is she reacting to that? That has a lot of weight. I also wish that Harrison’s dual-nature in this round was explained a bit more. I understood some of it by the end with Jarvis, but it left me more confused due to the lack of answers as opposed to interested. The comic paneling also tended to fall into a pattern that got repetitive a little. There were also a few typos, and I think that overall, while the plot was solid, the way it was told could have been executed better.  While not a bad round in the least, there were several points that could have been improved on.

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
Your art was fabulous from the get-go and jumped right into the story. The interlude with the Motlings was really cute and was a great way to give your audience a succinct summary of what happened in ToR if they weren’t around for that OCT and have been confused about where you’ve been headed with Angel. Anna had a lot of screen time and she looked absolutely adorable, though she didn’t get a whole lot of character development beyond guilt-tripping her about Rose’s death. I loved the color scheme you used in this round, everything was gloomy and desolate, which I thought was a fitting choice for Temperantia. While the paneling was really neat and engaging, I did notice a few consecutive pages that had almost the exact same pattern (13-15). My biggest concern is that I have no clue what is happening with Harrison right now, and not in a “what’s going to happen next” kind of way. I’m just confused, not curious.


awkwardkiller

:iconazraelsmith:
There was a great amount of development for Anna here, and the pictures added to the mood of the story really well. I like how vast the gate seemed in comparison to Anna, and the faces were really expressive. Anna’s actions also were great and added both humor to the round, as well as reminded me that Anna is kind of sort of a 4 year old child. I could follow her thought process throughout the round and understand why she acted the way she did. Crippling her wings was also an interesting and good choice, as it shows her overcoming not only a mental hurdle of rose’s death and her own innocence, but a physical one as well. The plotline with the demon I find really interesting and it intrigues me as to how it relates to the tournament. I think it has a lot of potential and it’s a really strong idea.

While I admire your courage for working with formatting as part of the tone, I don’t think you quite pulled it off as well as you had hoped. It sometimes brings the flow to a halt, as opposed to assisting it. Perhaps if there was less constant use of it, it might help. I also think this round could have used more development for Harrison. While he was in the round enough, we didn’t really get any further in how he feels about having to kill Adrael, or his mission. He’s just determined to do so and hesitant about the future. I also feel that while I appreciate diving right into the story helped a lot, there was a lot of information thrown at the readers at the very start and no tension to build it up. It was sort of like trying to give someone an entire banana cream pie, but you tripped and it ended up in their face. It’s not a bad technique, but it could use some practice and refining. I think this was a strong round for you, for sure, but some things you tried just didn’t work out.

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
I really enjoyed finding out who the blue-haired guy was. I honestly did not see that arc coming. The family-murdering demon was an awesome addition, but I wish it had been introduced a little bit earlier. Anna was really cute and genuinely seemed like a little girl in this entry, which I really appreciated. Conversely, I felt that Anna’s brother was quite a bit more mature than four years old in his flashback sequence. I know it was told from an older point of view, but his reactions to the massacre of his family was a bit too grown-up for his age. There were some typos and incorrect tenses (do instead of did, are instead of is, etc), repetitive descriptions (that guy, the shady guy, the center, etc), but overall, you did a very good job with this round.


Schizobot: [WINNER]


Due to the number of matches, we will have specific critique from three of the five judges. If you would like further elaboration from a specific judge, please note us.
As always, thank you for your patience!


Mona head by Motlings  vs Malley by Motlings

Aroda:

:iconazraelsmith:
Well characterized and once again, very good work. I liked the interaction between the characters and Mona’s eyes and strength becoming a weakness considering she can’t sleep in the 7th chapter. There was also a lot of motion and more moving images this round than in previous, which I thought was great improvement and kept things interesting. Overall, a really solid piece.
Some of the transitions could have been done better- I wasn’t so sure what the environments were after Malley’s demon drags Mona out of the forest, for example. I also didn’t really understand Chapter 6 so much? I understood the basis that Mona was loved by heavenly beings, not earth beings, but I’m not sure who the person or people were- the system just wasn’t explained enough for me and left me confused.

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
As always, your storytelling was very well done. You have found a good balance between drama, visuals, and keeping the plot moving at a good pace. The scene with Haneal was a nice interlude to help us recover from the Judea incident, and was a good piece of foreshadowing for the scene where Mona's fighting Malley and dreaming of her mother. Speaking of Malley, I loved the teamwork and friendship that was built between Mona and Malley when they were in the forest. Like with Judea, I found myself wishing they both could have a happy ending, but alas. Malley's death was poignant and well-executed. I loved the way the insect demon's design spread over Malley every time they came back onscreen.
My biggest issue with this entry were some amateurish design mistakes. Quite a lot of the dialogue was difficult to read, especially Mona's in the forest and the demon's text towards the end. Some of the transitions were a little rough as well. This may be more of a personal preference in my case, but some of the line art and coloring was a little…blobby. I primarily noticed this on faces, like some close-ups of Haneal and Gideon's eyes.
Overall this was a very solid entry. You managed to cover a lot of ground, and I can't wait to see what the next rounds will bring.

:iconbroeckchen:
In my opinion, the choice of medium and the execution made this one a clear winner. Both competitors here delivered well on the story part, but a fully colored entry with very good art, love for detail (for example in the lettering) and even animated bits just stands out a lot. I was invested throughout, and thought that it was a beautiful send-off for the opponent, which always pleases me. Again, in comparison to the opponent entry the lettering stood out especially to me - giving every character a distinct but still readable voice can be a ton of work, I know that. I appreciate that work.
I literally can’t come up with any downsides. You have clearly learned a lot from your past entries and the critique given on them, and you obviously tried to incorporate what you’ve learned into this one.

FinalDarkBlade and WingedOzelot:

:iconazraelsmith:
Very good use of comics in the first half, with impressive paneling that kept me interested and wasn’t boring. I thought Azrael’s plan was very interesting and creative, and really showed another piece of the big picture your plot is heading towards. There were excellent moments of suspense and the bond between the two characters really helped their interactions and the character development.
Sometimes for the comics, I found that the backgrounds were a bit hard to make out- some more distinct values can help with that. Blacker blacks and lighter lights with more contrast. Additionally, the prose part seemed rather simple in structure and sentence builds to me, and it wasn’t super great at keeping my attention. I do think there were points of, perhaps, “over-dramaticism” such as when Sam is captured by the demons, but then again, Azrael is kinda a prick who wants attention so I can totally get the theatrics.

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
Your entry had an amazing beginning; the story was intense, I loved Samael and Azrael's interaction, Azrael's little ploy to trap Samael, and the comic itself was lovely. The zombie fallen angels were a nice spin on the Behemoth concept, but I didn't feel like they were used to their fullest extent. Unfortunately, I felt like your story started unraveling after they got out of the forest. It wasn't the switch to writing that really did it, but I lost my investment around the time Gideon's wings were severed. Malley's pact with the insect demon seemed to come out of nowhere in your entry, and while I can see the purpose of contrasting Mona's ties to Heaven with Malley's ties to Hell, it ultimately fell flat and seemed more like a cheap plot twist than anything else.

:iconbroeckchen:
Very well-done compositions and I liked especially the concept of the pocket dimension. Also I totally have a think for insect demons, so that’s always good! The demon designs you come up with are very interesting to look at.
I must admit that this entry failed to get me invested throughout. While I always appreciate use of the judges, it almost comes across as if you took too many liberties here, not only with the killing but also with Azrael’s plans. It just sat wrong with me a little, especially since peripheral judges mostly seem to appear in your entries to be killed off soon at this point in time. Apart from that, it was of good quality, but pencil sketched pages with very samey lettering simply lose out against someone with equally high concept but fully colored and partially animated works.

Aroda: [WINNER]


Dusk Headshot by Motlings Trace Headshot by Motlings  vs   Jack Headshot by Motlings

ScytheVale:

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
I loved the minimalist coloring in this round. All the visuals were cohesive and for the most part the panels weren't as cluttered and packed as they have been in previous rounds. However, you were still trying to shove a lot of story into a very small amount of space and I never got fully invested in the comic. The sub-plot with Trace's may-or-may-not-be brother didn't get my interest at all. I do want to learn more about Trace and Kate, but the cryptic flashbacks and ambiguous family members weren't the way to go, especially this far into the tournament. While I loved the concept of the blight and Azrael acting like a mission director in a spy film, it wasn't enough to keep this comic afloat.

:iconarchangelhanael:
There is much less cluttered panels and very tasteful amounts of color used in the comic.  was well done and Jack was portrayed well. There were a number of times where the comic got a bit confusing and seemed a little out of place. There were far too many subplots in the beginning of the comic, which slowed the pace considerably. Occasionally the text would bleed into the side of the text bubbles, but that’s a small complaint.

:iconlamassu-mot:
Art style is improving, and Jack’s expressions were relatively well done. It’s less cluttered now, too.
However, everything was EXCEEDINGLY confusing. It was very difficult to follow, and the first half of the round was actually kind of bland. Don’t get me wrong, character development is cool, but too much can kill the mood.

Baka-Moyashi:

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
We've probably said this in every review, but I love seeing how much you've improved since your audition! You have a good grasp of body language as well as facial expressions, and that gives your work a lot more depth than just expressions and dialogue can do by themselves. The Egyptian themed angel in Patiencia was a nice break from the typically Western and Oriental designs we've seen in most entries. Overall it was a very concise entry, the story didn't lag, but there wasn't a whole lot of new character development on Jack's part either.

:iconarchangelhanael:
I love how Trace, Dusk, and Azrael were portrayed and they all were in character. I was also impressed with the fact Jack’s leg injury from round one is still mentioned. While checking back in round one, it’s clear that there is a massive improvement in the art style as a whole through the competition.

:iconlamassu-mot:
Actually, the story of this went surprisingly smoothly, and I know I point this out in a lot of rounds, but Trace was in character, and stayed as such pretty well. I also like the use of angels and how some of them differ in wings. I quite liked the one who attacked Trace and Jack.
While Trace was in character, Dusk was not. I’m certain, given that she’s an intelligent being with her own powers, she would have intervened during the fight with the angel. As it was, she seemed to be there just to BE there.

Baka-Moyashi: [WINNER]


Livy By Broeckchen-d7py91z by Motlings vs Harrison  by Motlings

crazyshiro:

:iconazraelsmith:
The prose was strong and it flowed together well. I didn’t get bored reading it. The characters were developed well, and I think that the story had very good pacing. I also liked the events with Angel Olien Dae, as it guides your plot in an interesting direction, but I wonder if maybe some people won’t understand the reference?
It wasn’t a huge issue, but the formatting was really weird to me. There were large spaces on the bottom of the page that I wondered why they were there. It kinda distracted me. I liked the images in the background but at times, it could be hard to read. Also I don’t know why, and I can’t really explain this, but I don’t really feel any emotional connection to the characters. This is a rather frustrating point because I can’t pinpoint why, and thus can’t give a suggestion about how to fix it.

:iconarchangelhanael:
The character development for Harrison and Angel was excellent and the dialogue moved the round along nicely. Overall, the pacing was good but the flashbacks near the beginning of the prose were jarring.

:iconlamassu-mot:
Good descriptions, good portrayal of both characters, creative means of incapacitation, but flipping between present and flashbacks are jarring and confusing at first

Schizobot:

:iconazraelsmith:
I really liked the consistency of the shape and location of the pictures during the “chapter titles.” I also liked the way Livy was characterized as manipulative and the death fit in with your style in a very violent and grungy way.
I don’t feel like I got a real attachment to the opponent in this round, and to be honest, at the end, I had trouble realizing it was Livy even though I knew who it was going into the round. I also felt like the actual fight was far too short and seemed over too quick, compared to the rest of the pacing. And since I mentioned it in the other entrant’s round, I’ll mention it again here- I do like the inclusion of Angel, but I’m really not sure how well the reference is going to go for those who haven’t read through Tournament of Rings.

:iconarchangelhanael:
I really liked the book style in this round, mimicking Shiro’s usual style. The prose flowed beautifully and it was nice to see the clock tower once again. I have to agree with Will as well on cons. It was hard to tell that it was Livy at the end, I had to reread it to catch it.

:iconlamassu-mot:
I like how Schizo’s round mirror’s Shiro’s usual bookish style. Livy was also sufficiently creepy, and used his powers well in his attempts to destroy Harrison. Revisiting the clock tower was also quite a nice touch.
My main concern was that it was never well implied that Harrison was fighting Livy.

Schizobot: [WINNER]


Stranger head by Motlings vs Annamniel By Broeckchen-d7pyiy4 by Motlings Rose By Broeckchen-d7pyom6 by Motlings

bowgallery:

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
I loved the concept for the mirrors and how they changed Fallon back into his human form. Stranger's comments on his appearance were just as creepy as always, making me equally repulsed and interested where he's going to go this round. I loved the pallet you used for this round, the soft pastels complimented Anna, Rose, and Fallon, and then there's Stranger in his dark, muddy red. It was definitely striking.
I did feel like less care was put into this entry than past ones. While the story was okay, the art and proofing was sometimes lacking. I noticed at least one hand put on backwards, in addition to a number of typos.

:iconarchangelhanael:
The use of color and paneling, once again, were lovely. The expressions show just how each character feels without the need for words to describe it

:iconbroeckchen:
Your incorporation of Fallon is just a joy to read, and Stranger stays a very intriguing character. You clearly know where you can cut corners in your art to work efficiently without sacrificing too much quality, and you have a good eye for storyboarding and panel layout.
This entry felt… as if it was less important to you than those before it. There were spelling errors that really broke my immersion while reading, and the confrontation with your opponent seemed kind of rushed and a bit loveless. There were also some confusing parts in your entry - like the flashback Stranger seemed to have. Was that his own memory? But the character in it looked like his brother? That part simply confused me.
All in all, it came across as if you felt a bit too secure and ended up pulling away some time and effort from this entry that you put into the ones before it. Maybe some work on your pacing while thinking of the script can help with that already. And spellchecks, spellchecks, spellchecks!

awkwardkiller  

:iconthe-angel-adrael:
This was easily my favorite of your entries. I loved how you really built the relationship between Fallon and Anna, and made the journey into a trek of a couple weeks rather than a sprint to the finish line. Heaven is pretty large, after all! Your writing has improved so much, and it's been amazing seeing you grow as a writer and artist.

:iconarchangelhanael:
The writing style is improving; there were no underlined or italicized words to show who was talking, but it was easy to see who was speaking without it. The prose flowed at a great pace and the images enhanced the atmosphere wonderfully, though there were a few typos in part 3

:iconbroeckchen:
You obviously work a lot on improving, and it shows! Your use of prose gets better with every entry, and your characters are beginning to ooze with personality. It’s obvious that you pay attention to our criticism, and try to learn something new with every single entry. I loved the sendoff you gave your opponent, too. You obviously took the time to extrapolate the most striking aspect of Stranger (his manipulative behavior) and to create an ending to his story that not only furthered your own, but also did the opponent character justice. That is an excellent thing to do.
I was completely taken by surprise when you made the gutsy move to kill off half of your protagonist duo. Having your characters take harsh losses and defeats like this is something that is interesting to read - I really wanted to see you in the next round, to find out where this is going and what you will do next.
I also noticed that you incorporate more art into your entries now. Yes please! That is a very pleasant break for the eye amidst the text, I hope you keep up that trend!
Literature is always a medium that will put you at a slight disadvantage if the others around you work with art, since it’s more straining to read and must be done very well to outdo impressive visuals. Make absolutely, absolutely sure to spellcheck, best let someone else proofread as well, and maybe consider spiffing up your work a little more. That doesn’t have to mean dropping literature as your medium entirely, but you can experiment with storybook elements or maybe even interactive tidbits. Experimenting with you medium can yield incredibly pleasant and creative results, and creativity and easy readability are always big pluses.

awkwardkiller: [WINNER]
Location: Sixth Ring of Heaven
Temperantia = Temperance


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